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Thursday, 13 September 2018

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WHO: Room 7
WHAT: played the maths game
WHEN: Thursday 14th September
WHERE: in the hall
WHY: to practice our maths skills
HOW: we walked there, in teams of 6.

Bad Intro:  Room 7 played the maths game. It was Thursday 14th September 2018. We were in the hall. We did it to practice our maths skills. We walked there and we were in teams.
*notice how the information are all in separate sentences* - don’t do that, it’s boring to read.

On Thursday morning (the 14th September 2018), Room 7 walked out the to the hall to play the maths game. Room 7 plays this game so we can practice our maths skills and have a bit of a running around break.
*Put the information into sentences TOGETHER. Much better to read*

WHO: Me and my family
WHAT: went to the beach
WHEN: Saturday 8th September
WHERE: Mission bay
WHY: to have fun and enjoy the sunshine
HOW: drove in the car
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WHO: me and my best friend
WHAT: went to the movies and had lunch
WHEN: on Sunday 9th September
WHERE: Sylvia Park
WHY: for my birthday
HOW: mum dropped us off in the car
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WHO: Me and my family
WHAT: went to nana’s house
WHEN: after church on Sunday 9th September
WHERE: nana’s house in Panmure
WHY: to have lunch together, help plan for cousins 21st party

HOW: drove in the van

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Capital ‘I’
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Capital letters for names of places and people
Full stops at the end of a sentence


Speech marks when people are talking


Punctuation - ? ! ; : ‘


Words are written in past tense

Connectives - next, then, afterwards

Interesting and difficult adjectives


Deep features



Introduction has who, what, when, where, why, and how


Conclusion has a reflective statement or says how you felt
Ideas/events in the right order
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Metaphors and similes
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Wednesday, 12 September 2018

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Surface features
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Capital letters at the beginning of a sentence
Capital ‘I’
Capital letters for names of places and people
Full stops at the end of a sentence
Speech marks when people are talking
Punctuation - ? ! ; : ‘
Words are written in past tense
Connectives - next, then, afterwards
Interesting and difficult adjectives
Deep features
Introduction has who, what, when, where, why, and how
Conclusion has a reflective statement or says how you felt
Ideas/events in the right order
3 paragraphs
Metaphors and similes
Different types of sentences - short, long, compound and complex